Blindly (or: Inspired by a Lonely Astronomer)
Life is merely a matter of
Balance–
between pressures from within
and the gravity of
Life without.
Hydro-static equilibrium
of the mind
keeps the heart from exploding
or crushing under the
Force of
the Universe.
Forces incomprehensible
in Blackness
shapes stars and galaxies into
Curves of intellect
and reason.
On what curve do we travel
through the
Chaos Void?
All existence is merely measured
as relative luminosity
within the great deep
black Field–
Perspective limited by
laws of Time
and Love.
We see one curve, one
spark of Light, and then
we dream of nebulas
And gaping holes of
Hope in
the fabric of Reality.
It is a moment’s infatuation
with Eternity.
We are on a blind date with
the Universe.
vampofthedeep said,
April 8, 2009 at 4:40 pm
Hmm…interesting. I really liked your second-to-last part there, that one flowed the most easily to me. Very nice wording with that. The one thing I noticed were the lines “Hydro-static equilibrium” and “as relative luminosity”, both of which seemed a bit off compared to the rest. I’m not sure what, either they don’t flow as well or they’re too wordy.
Other than that, this is pretty, very nice to read aloud, and is very good with the visuals it brings to mind. I keep imagining certain pictures in our shared space book! Good job.
verumdiligo said,
April 8, 2009 at 4:56 pm
It figures that you’d notice the lines with actual astronomical terms in them. Yeah, they sound a little more scientific, but if you get what they mean they add some depth, which I like. You’re right that they don’t flow as well. Oh well.